You spoke so sweet, I was in awe,
Sweet words I kissed, soft cheeks I touched they were so raw
Honey-tongued mouth, lips like candies to me
You were my rose, my love, but thorns kept me away?
I opened my heart, I gave it to you.
I closed my senses only for you.
But what have I done to deserve this plight?
You tore my heart, this is not right.
I see you as a bee and there was a daisy, I knew it was not me
But eyes were shut, ears were covered, and heart was not free.
Instincts wide open, reality screaming
And now, I’m struggling of forgetting.
-Soul in Surreal
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Originally written on January 10 at 2:00 AM
elementhealing said:
How about, I’m Struggling
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soulinsurreal said:
Thanks for the great idea! 🙂 What do you think of Loving You is a Struggle? isn’t it too negative and hurtful?
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elementhealing said:
I don’t think that it’s too negative. It’s being real. Sometimes love is a struggle! It’s not all Mountain happiness. Some days it’s trudging through the muck
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soulinsurreal said:
Yes. You are definitely right! The moment that I entered my previous reply to your comment, my mind told me that it was not a bad title, after all that’s what my poem screams. right?
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elementhealing said:
Yes it is. I think it’s a great title.
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soulinsurreal said:
Thank you for the suggestion and idea. I appreciate it very much. 🙂
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elementhealing said:
You’re welcome. The poem is great and I enjoyed helping 🙂
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soulinsurreal said:
Thanks for considering my poem to be great! That motivates me to write even more. I love poetry. You may want to check this poem that I also wrote https://soulinsurreal.wordpress.com/2015/12/20/christmas-massacre/
I am looking forward to your comment or statement on my poem. 🙂
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elementhealing said:
I look forward to it
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polaris299 said:
Toxic Rose comes to mind for me. Very neatly penned
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soulinsurreal said:
Thank you very much! I like the title suggestion! 🙂
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polaris299 said:
smile, glad you enjoyed it. what you described seem to fit very well. The beauty of the first words sank into you and there you were, smelling the rose. Then the rose became poisoned and left you in tatters
Cheers
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soulinsurreal said:
When I was in college, I used to be analyzing poems, plays, among others. And now there you are! one person just analyzed my written poem. This makes my heart leap up with glee or tears, I don’t know. 🙂 Thank you!
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polaris299 said:
smile, it is always a good day when I can make a lady smile.
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soulinsurreal said:
Such a gentleman blogger then! Thank you! 🙂
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Samc95xc said:
How about My Heart?
Btw the poem is Raw, it comes from your heart and I like it!
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soulinsurreal said:
Yes, it is. Thanks for the title suggestion. Glad you like it 🙂
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Samc95xc said:
🙂
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juliawinnacker said:
Happy New Year!
I like your poem, it seems to come right from your heart. As for the title, “Shattered Dreams” sprang right into my mind, but I’m not sure if it’s a good suggestion. Anyway thank you so much for following my humble blog 🙂
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soulinsurreal said:
Shattered Dreams! Like that! Thank you very much for the title suggestion! 🙂
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